A Perfect Murder

Author: Renate Yates
Length: short
Publication Details: Chatfield, H and Williamson, J, A Twist in the Tale, A Collection of Stories, Longman, 1996. OR Knight, S (ed), Crimes for a Summer Christmas, Allen & Unwin, 1990, p. 141-143.
Setting: a children’s playground in an Australian park
Character(s): a mother, two small figures and a victim
Narrator: third person
Keywords: murder, necessity, protection, devotion, motherhood, child welfare, innocence, familial expectations, responsibilities, risk, caution, courage, twist in the tale, survival.

What is the most common motive for murder? If you have watched the news this month, it would be safe to say that the 21st Century is littered with ideology, or hate crime. In the literature world, we would envisage some kind of plot of revenge due to greed, jealousy, or a dispute. In essence, one might argue there are only ever three motives for anything: greed, survival or revenge. According to experts, Drawdy, Myers and Myers (“Homicide Victim/Offender Relationship in Florida Medical Examiner District 8”) there are two:

instrumental homicides are motivated by gain (i.e. money or similar forms), whereas expressive homicides are emotionally-based, namely fueled by anger, and may be impulsive.

Yates’ title implies we will get inside the mindset of a murderer, rather than a victim, who would not be either aware of their imminent end or would not be around to tell their story, given that it is “perfect”. What’s more, this murderer is so good, he or she does not get caught. The addition of the word, “perfect”, speaks volumes. Could it also imply that it was efficient? Carried out with little manpower? Well-timed? Without any hiccups? Without witnesses? It is declared that “Murder was a solitary business, or ought to be.”

The reader approaches A Perfect Murder like the board game Cluedo, trying to figure out the murderer and any accomplices, the victim, murder weapon and location. True to the conventions of a ‘twist in the tale‘ short story, this is revealed in the final paragraph.

From the outset we know “she” is the murderer but then we are introduced to her family “the two small figures by the window” for whom she cares dearly as a mother should: “her ways with the two of them were invariably loving, always gentle and tender.” However, the words “with the two of them” imply that she is not so kind and caring to others. Conflicted by this dichotomy (and aware of a generalisation that most murderers are male) we read on. “…in certain situations, she could be utterly heartless, at times even merciless” which seems to confirm things. Yet how can someone so caring and loving become a murderer? Under what circumstances? The author positions us to feel a certain way towards her by way of techniques such as characterisation and point of view.

Thematically, the story illustrates a mother’s obligation to put her children’s needs ahead of her own: “their mother gave them a drink but ate nothing herself.” Furthermore, it examines the protective nature of parents towards young children in particular, “…no harm would come to them while she was there.” It also highlights the lengths a mother is willing to go to for her family. She sheltered them from learning the truth too soon. The murder was a risk she was willing to take:


The quote above, from the text, reminds me not only of the imminent danger in various sports we enjoy but continue to do, but of active play at Swanson School in Auckland. Here, the principal, Bruce McLachlan, rid the school of playtime rules as part of a successful university experiment. “We want kids to be safe and to look after them, but we end up wrapping them in cotton wool when in fact they should be able to fall over.” The study found that learning to deal with danger was necessary. Therein lay the reward.

Auckland University of Technology (AUT) professor of public health Grant Schofield, who worked on the research project, said there are too many rules in modern playgrounds. “The great paradox of cotton-woolling children is it’s more dangerous in the long-run.” Society’s obsession with protecting children ignores the benefits of risk-taking, he said.

As the story’s setting shifts from night to day and from indoors to outdoors, the author introduces several double meanings raising questions about what is really going on. Yates appears to take a dig at us, commenting at how observant the murderer is, “…she looked about her, missing nothing.” Whereas we are invariably, and ironically, missing some vital clues.

According to an FBI report on Serial Murder, such murders involve strangers. An offender selects a victim, regardless of the category, based upon availability, vulnerability, and desirability. How does this apply to our story?

Availability is explained as the lifestyle of the victim or circumstances…that allow the offender access to the victim [in this case the park]. Vulnerability is defined as the degree to which the victim is susceptible to attack by the offender [in the story, the victim is unsuspecting]. Desirability is described as the appeal of the victim to the offender. Desirability involves numerous factors based upon the motivation of the offender and may include factors dealing with the race, gender, ethnic background, age of the victim, or other specific preferences the offender determines [“the small plump figure thrilled her”].

To appreciate the surprise ending even more, read it again and note how the author builds suspense by withholding information or creating ambiguity: “two small figures”, “small sleeping forms”, “the little ones.” Note also how the narrative is crafted so that foreshadowing exits only in retrospect: “she was upon her quarry.” Her choice of verbs create an illusion, developing the extended metaphor.

I first read this in 2011, my first year of teaching and taught it to a Year 9 class (the first year of secondary school). Students do not usually deduce the details to be able to make a solid accusation prior to the final paragraph which serves to bring the game to an abrupt end. I admit that the twist eludes me too, but at least it makes me laugh.

Is she really a murderer though? After all, she is merely attempting to fulfil the first two tiers of Maslow’s hierarchy of needs. First, she is spurred on to supply physiological needs followed by safety needs. She reaches self-actualisation too because she accepts the facts – that this was “a simple, necessary murder.”



Theme(s): For mothers, families always come first. One must do what is necessary to survive. Protect the innocence of childhood, once lost it cannot be restored. Have the courage of your convictions to follow through on your dreams/goals. Plan first. Some risks are worthwhile.

Connection(s): This short story can be studied in conjunction with: The Foal by Mikhail Sholokhov located in The Fate of a Man and Early Stories by Sholokhov.


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I am a secondary school teacher at a school in New Zealand.

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